The story might become something with a message and be entertaining and intriguing and all that. But right now, I am bored. I don't like the writing. I don't care for the characters and their communication is unengaging. I have no want to read the story to learn what becomes of anyone or anything. 

Sorry to this story, it's probably me, not you.

I found this choppy and really hard to follow. And very uninteresting to boot. 

I read most of it but didn't like the writing.