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kailey_luminouslibro 's review for:
Greyfax Grimwald
by Niel Hancock
I don't know what kind of crap this is, but it is absolutely unreadable! The sentence structure is appalling, and every decent rule of good writing is broken on every page. Apparently, this writer has never even heard of stuff that every writer learns (or should have learned) in 5th grade, like that you shouldn't use too many adjectives, and you shouldn't use the same adjective over and over.
"The delightful, soft, glowing movements of the sun..."
Three adjectives were necessary here?
"Leaving all that world frozen by the cold ice night..."
Argh! The redundancy!
"The cold snow"
Do you really need to say that snow is cold? Really?
The characters are inconsistent in their behaviour and their dialogue is boring in the extreme.
The styles are mixed in too. It's supposed to be set in olden times, but the expressions used are decidedly modern day.
The plot falters along with lots of pompous talk about things being "important" but nothing ever happens.
Another rule of writing: Don't TELL me it's "important." Show me. Make me FEEL that it is important without telling me so.
The awfulness of this book is beyond words. It amazes me that this worthless stuff was ever published for actual human beings to read.
I couldn't even finish it. I made it a little past halfway through, and just couldn't stomach it anymore. My brain feels violated.
This author obviously has no education and no training in writing.
I need to read some Dickens or something to wash out my mind and remind me what real English and good grammar looks like.
Whoever this author's editor was, he's an idiot, and has inflicted a monstrousity on the world.
"The delightful, soft, glowing movements of the sun..."
Three adjectives were necessary here?
"Leaving all that world frozen by the cold ice night..."
Argh! The redundancy!
"The cold snow"
Do you really need to say that snow is cold? Really?
The characters are inconsistent in their behaviour and their dialogue is boring in the extreme.
The styles are mixed in too. It's supposed to be set in olden times, but the expressions used are decidedly modern day.
The plot falters along with lots of pompous talk about things being "important" but nothing ever happens.
Another rule of writing: Don't TELL me it's "important." Show me. Make me FEEL that it is important without telling me so.
The awfulness of this book is beyond words. It amazes me that this worthless stuff was ever published for actual human beings to read.
I couldn't even finish it. I made it a little past halfway through, and just couldn't stomach it anymore. My brain feels violated.
This author obviously has no education and no training in writing.
I need to read some Dickens or something to wash out my mind and remind me what real English and good grammar looks like.
Whoever this author's editor was, he's an idiot, and has inflicted a monstrousity on the world.