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The Hurricane Wars by Thea Guanzon
DID NOT FINISH: 3%

This is amateur writing.  Run on sentences.  Superfluous adjectives.  Tells me nothing about the situation or characters.  

This is the kind of writing I would use writing an essay to make my word count when I didn't have anything to say. 

Not that it’s any great mystery as to why they left this grandfather behind, Talasyn mused, watching from a dim corner of the thatched longhouse as the stooped, elderly cleric in pale yellow robes struggled to lift a large pewter goblet over the crackling fire that was reflecting off his marble-ball scalp.