I can deal with immature writing, but even I couldn't get past sparkles shooting from someone's "ladyparts" and then running away embarrassed! Reading this story made me feel like I had walked in on two twelve-year-olds trying to figure out sex, getting it all wrong, knowing they're getting it wrong, and then just running away naked instead of talking or getting dressed and deciding to try again after maturing. (Ear sex from Family Guy, anyone?)