I don’t even know what this is. The grammar is atrocious. The writing is so verbose, full of random adjectives and adverbs, that I can’t make any sense of the actual story.

Many of the words are misused, adding to the confusion. The style is unnecessarily flowery, to the point where you have to dig through paragraphs of description and nonsense to get to an actual plot point.

I don’t know who any of the characters are or what they are doing or what they want. There is no clear storytelling.

Examples of misused words:
“ A single tear was produced but quickly wept with the wind.”
“She looked to the sky with hesitance...”
“She hugged tightly upon her waning figure,”
“Her determination was beginning to confuse itself.”

Examples of verbose writing:
“More tears had formed, and the steady trickle of salinity would outlast the winds as a crust began to form upon the cracks of her upper lips.”
(How many upper lips does she have?!?!)

“It wasn’t how he wanted it, but the anticipated slow decay of her innocence couldn’t be well safeguarded given the circumstance of his gamble. “
(What does that even mean?!?!)

This book desperately needs an editor.

Disclaimer: I received a copy of this book from the author in exchange for a free and honest review. All the opinions stated here are my own true thoughts, and are not influenced by anyone.