librarybonanza 's review for:

1.0

Age: Kindergarten-1st grade

The premise of the story is unique and relatable, especially the ending (running late with kids in tow) but the rhyme scheme is so drearily forced (A, B, C, B). I hate when authors use useless words to simply force a rhyme such as:
Nate says, "Wait! I need my bunny!"
Kate regards him with dismay.
"Just one minute, I'll be speedy...."
Kate gives up. "That's fine, okay."

The use of excessive punctuation also creates havoc on the flow of the story. Sometimes the syllabic count is off. I just...so desperately wish this was written as prose.