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The Concealed
by S.K. Horton
adventurous
fast-paced
Plot or Character Driven:
A mix
Strong character development:
Complicated
Loveable characters:
No
Diverse cast of characters:
No
Flaws of characters a main focus:
No
Thank you to NetGalley for an e-ARC in exchange for an honest review
To be completely honest, I was not impressed with this. Sure, we had a continuous plotline which was good - and our characters had personalities that didn't chop and change at will. But we didn't have enough detail in anything!
This book was just under 300 pages, and tries to cover a lot in that time. Our fmc crosses continents to start an elite boarding school, is swept into a hidden world, and fights in a prophesised war all in that time. I just felt too much like the story was listing plot points one after another like in a first draft, rather than crafting a narrative. I do think though, that with some tightening up and some more developed writing the underlying story had potential!
My only other caveat is with our fmc who was almost insufferably 'not like other girls', and who promptly forgot her parents and her brother when she crossed worlds (who she specifically said was incredibly important to her right at the start of the book). I think maybe either you should mention them and they be important to character development, or just not mention them at all.
To be completely honest, I was not impressed with this. Sure, we had a continuous plotline which was good - and our characters had personalities that didn't chop and change at will. But we didn't have enough detail in anything!
This book was just under 300 pages, and tries to cover a lot in that time. Our fmc crosses continents to start an elite boarding school, is swept into a hidden world, and fights in a prophesised war all in that time. I just felt too much like the story was listing plot points one after another like in a first draft, rather than crafting a narrative. I do think though, that with some tightening up and some more developed writing the underlying story had potential!
My only other caveat is with our fmc who was almost insufferably 'not like other girls', and who promptly forgot her parents and her brother when she crossed worlds (who she specifically said was incredibly important to her right at the start of the book). I think maybe either you should mention them and they be important to character development, or just not mention them at all.